Romantic Friday Writers: Whispers

http://fridaynightwriters.blogspot.com/ This blog has a challenge for writers of romance/love stories to write 400 words on a theme each Friday.  The theme this week is Whispers.

This week I continue on with Kaitlyn and Jason, characters who have been featured in my last four or so Friday posts!  Starting in November, I’ll be doing National Novel Writing Month, and I plan to use the weekly challenges to expand the book I’ll be working on.  So, the next two weeks will probably be the last of Kaitlyn and Jason for a while.

Word Count: 383

Full Critique is Fine (In fact, have absolutely no fear of being too harsh with me. I value intense criticism because I think it will make me a stronger and better writer. Over years of workshops and critiques, I have developed an extremely thick skin for this sort of thing. Detailed, line by line tearing it apart will be totally fine. You won’t hurt my feelings, I promise).

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Kaitlyn pushed open the door to the hospital room. Jason and his daughter both looked over.  The girl, around fifteen years old, looked Kaitlyn slowly up and down.  Comparing her to Linda, no doubt. Beautiful and charming Linda, whom Kaitlyn could never live up to.  Amelia was beautiful. Her skin was a warm golden blend between Linda’s porcelin and Jason’s deep mahogany. Her eyes were large and framed in lush lashes. Wheat colored hair frizzed around hr forehad, the rest pulled into a small ponytail. Her eyes were startlingly light colored.

It was strange. Kaitlyn couldn’t quite blieve that this was Jason’s child. She still felt like they were fifteen themselves.

Withering under Amelia’s judging gaze, Kaitlyn came closer to the bed.

“Could you give us a few minutes, sweetheart?” Jason said, squeezing Amelia’s hand.

The girl nodded and left the room, gently closing the door behind her.  Kaitlyn wasn’t sure what to say.  “Are you okay?” she whispered at last.

“I’ll be fine,” he said with a smile. “It’s not a big deal, I promise.”

Kaitlyn licked her lips.  She could no longer deny the powerful feelings pulsing through her body.  “I waited twenty years for you to love me as much as I love you,” she said.

“No,” he said so softly that she leaned her elbows on the side of his bed and leaned close to his head. Close enough to feel his breath on her face. “I always loved you,” he said, “I just couldn’t admit it.”

“Why did you marry Linda?”

“At the time I thought it was the right thing to do.” He paused, looked down and then back into her eyes. “I was wrong.”

“Did you love her?”

He twisted the fingers of one of his hands through hers. “Yes,” he said, “I did.  And I miss her.  But you and I had something really special and I think we were always meant to be together.”

Kaitlyn felt tears tickling her chin. She had waited so many years to hear him say this. Feeling his fingers on hers had her body tingling. It had been so long since his firm grip had been on her arm.  Then she went for a brand new experience. She leaned even closer and touched her lips to his.

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